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My taste of songs.
I didn't like to sing a songs because I was terrible at music. Also I didn't like listening to music because almost lyrics of songs is about love between women and men. The reason why I don't like love songs is "love between women and men isn't all of my life." Love between women and men is important part, but I have also important things beside love with boyfriend. When you told to me about your thinking such as you wanted to concentrate on your career, I really agreed with your opinion in my mind. There are many important things in my life.
I was sick of lyrics about love. I liked songs about chasing dream and giving comfort. When I was a high school student, I loved songs about dream. At that time I was thinking of my future job for every moment. I thought I had to endure my high schooldays to became a bird which can fly high. I liked lyrics such as "I'm looked like worthless now, but My dream will be come true someday."
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Hello Isabel! Please check my corrections. It was nice talking to you again. Anyway, I will call you again tomorrow my dear. Have a good night! Take care!
-Teacher Chloe
My taste of songs.
>>CorrectI didn\'t like to sing a songs because I was terrible at music.
>>I don't like to sing any kind of songs because I am not musically inclined.
Also I didn\'t like listening to music because almost lyrics of songs is about love between women and men.
>>I don't even like to listen to music because song lyrics nowadays are mostly about love.
The reason why I don\'t like love songs is \"love between women and men isn\'t all of my life.
>>I don't like love songs because I am not really interested to it.
\" Love between women and men is important part, but I have also important things beside love with boyfriend.
>>Love is important in our lives. I am not saying that my boyfriend is not important to me but I have to prioritize the things that are more important.
When you told to me about your thinking such as you wanted to concentrate on your career, I really agreed with your opinion in my mind.
>>I agreed when you told me that you wanted to concentrate on your career.
There are many important things in my life.
>>CorrectI was sick of lyrics about love.
>> I am sick of lyrics about love.
I liked songs about chasing dream and giving comfort.
>>I only like songs that are very comforting.
When I was a high school student, I loved songs about dream.
>> When I was a high school student, I loved songs about dream.
At that time I was thinking of my future job for every moment.
>>When I am listening to music about dream, I am really thinking about my future.
I thought I had to endure my high schooldays to became a bird which can fly high.
>>I thought I had to enjoy my high school days to become a bird which can fly high.
I liked lyrics such as \"I\'m looked like worthless now, but My dream will be come true someday.\"
>> I like this passage of a song \"I\'m looked like worthless now, but my dream will be come true someday.\"
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