South Korea is about to approve vaccinating children ages 5-11. What is your opinion about this? Is
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I think that it is a good thing because nowadays, there are many young confirmed case. So, I think that it is need to be vaccinated children ages 5-11. Of course, I know that there are side effects and preventing COVID-19 with vaccine is not easy. I was vaccinated,  but I got COVID-19. Like me, there are many instances which got it. However, if we are vaccinated, we will be able to reduce symptoms. So, I think it is a good thing.
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Hi Kimberly!
Vaccination is very important regardless of the age. But still, we need to be very mindful of the side effects so we have to consult a doctore first. :)
I think that it is a good thing because nowadays, there are many young confirmed case.
>> I think that it is a good thing because nowadays, there are many confirmed cases for the youth.
So, I think that it is need to be vaccinated children ages 5-11.
>> So, I think that children ages 5-11 should be vaccinated.
Of course, I know that there are side effects and preventing COVID-19 with vaccine is not easy.
>> Of course I know that there are side effects and preventing COVID-19 with the vaccine is not easy.
I was vaccinated,  but I got COVID-19.
>> I am vaccinated but I still got COVID-19.
Like me, there are many instances which got it.
>> Like me, there are many instances why I got it.
However, if we are vaccinated, we will be able to reduce symptoms.
>> CORRECT
So, I think it is a good thing.
>> CORRECT
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