Space travel
학생이 쓴 원문
The space is still the realm of God. There are too many unspecified parts of the space, including its principles and components. The ancient people believed that there was a god in the space. The God make a lightning and thunder, wind and rain, and so on. In the modern times, mankind start to study a space. Neil Armstrong set foot on the moon. It is in July 1969. Since then, mankind has sent a probe to confirm the existence of life on Mars and Jupiter. But it doesn't yet specify exactly about the existence of life. The space travel is very attractive. It is also very expensive. And it has not become yet popular. The person who experienced the space travel says it was very fantastic. I would like to space travel, but I am more curious about the working principle and life forms of the space.
강사 첨삭
I\'m sure you\'ve heard about the Russian cosmonaut Yuri Gagarin. It is said that he became the first human to travel into space when he launched into orbit on April 12, 1961. As for me, I\'m not sure I\'d like to visit the vast outer space even if they\'ll give me a free ride. The outer space is immense thus it\'s too scary because anything could happen beyond anyone\'s control.
See you on Wednesday!
Take care!
~T. Lynn
The space is still the realm of God.
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There are too many unspecified parts of the space, including its principles and components.
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The ancient people believed that there was a god in the space.
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The God make a lightning and thunder, wind and rain, and so on.
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In the modern times, mankind start to study a space.
>> In the modern times, mankind started to study the space.
Neil Armstrong set foot on the moon. It is in July 1969.
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OR>> Neil Armstrong set foot on the moon on July 1969.
Since then, mankind has sent a probe team to confirm the existence of life on Mars and Jupiter.
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But it doesn\'t yet specify exactly about the existence of life.
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The space travel is very attractive.
>> Space travel is very attractive.
It is also very expensive.
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And it has not become yet popular.
>> And it has not become popular yet.
The person who experienced the space travel says it was very fantastic.
>> correct!
I would like to space travel, but I am more curious about the working principle and life forms of the space.
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