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Hi, [이름]!

Thank you for sharing this. In this entry, I have some alternatives as well to make it sound more appealing to the ears. I added and omitted some redundant words to not make your sentences too wordy and sound clear and precise. I hope they would help. For questions, you know where to find me. ^^

~Elica~

There are a lot of hotels that I experienced in the world, but the first thing that comes to mind is the hotel ‘Mugunghwa’. 

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Its name means a rose of Sharon and Korean national flower. It is located in Seoul and takes 2hours by car from my hometown.

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 The hotel is designed based on Korean traditional structure, which is called “Hanok” and is made of wood and mud. 

>> The hotel is designed based on a Korean traditional structure, which is called “Hanok” and is made of wood and mud.  

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>>The hotel is designed based on a Korean  traditional form, called “Hanok” and is made of wood and mud.  

 

 The hotel doesn’t have modern facilities because the building is equipped with traditional forms. 

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We can experience Korean traditional kitchen and the hotel offers all customers the opportunity which can participate in the class for Korean traditional instruments and games.

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 I think it is beneficial for people to stay in the hotel and there are several reasons why I recommend the hotel.

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>> I think it is beneficial for people to stay in the hotel and there are several reasons why I recommend the said hotel. 

First, it’s quiet. 

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As you know, it’s not easy to find some quiet places when you live in a city. 

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Second, I can enjoy the Korean traditional teas with traditional music in a quiet mood. 

>>Second, I can enjoy traditional teas with traditional music in a solemn mood.

Lastly, the hotel offers Korean traditional food ‘삼계탕’ and traditional alcohol ‘막걸리’, which is made of rice for free of charge

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