speaking part2

Hi, [이름]!

Thanks for the ideas. I hope the corrections I made could help. 

~Elica~

There are a lot of skills that I have acquired, but the latest skill that comes to mind is cooking.

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 I decided to learn it because I’m going to study and live alone in Canada. 

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I heard that Canadian restaurants usually were expensive due to tip. 

>>I heard that Canadian restaurants were usually expensive due to tips.

Moreover, I can learn about cooking from my mother because she is a cook.

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 I don’t really know since when I learned it from mother. 

>> I don’t really know since when I\'ve learned it from my mother. 

Every time I have meals with mother in our house, I assist her and learn how to handle kitchen knives and how to mix diverse sources, but I need to more brush up on it.

>>Every time I have meals with my mother at home, I would assist her and learn how to handle kitchen knives and how to mix various ingredients, but I need to brush up on it more.

 Cooking has strongly affected my life in positive ways. 

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First, it’s saved me money while I live alone. 

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Many people living alone usually eat out or order delivery foods and all they are more expensive than cooking in person.

>>Many people living alone usually eat out or order delivery foods and they are more expensive than cooking themselves.

 Seconds, I get to eat Korean foods whenever I want. 

>>Second, I get to eat Korean foods whenever I want.

Some Korean foods and ingredients might be uncommon and unavailable in other countries. 

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Lastly, I can invite friends to my house and cook in person. 

>>Lastly, I can invite friends to my house and cook myself

I literally want to have home party with foreigner friends and treat Korean foods to them. 

>>I literally want to have a home party with foreign friends and treat them with Korean food. 

Q) Some Korean foods and ingredients might be uncommon and unavailable in other countries.

In this sentence, can I use ‘abroad/ oversea’ instead of ‘in other countries’? and which one do you think better between ‘materials’ and ‘ingredients’?

>>Yes, you can use \"abroad\" or \"overseas\" instead of \"in other countries\". If you talk about cooking and the things you put into your dish, then you must use \"ingredients\".