Speciality of my region

2016-05-30 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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I live in Ahyeondong, Mapo-gu(province) in seoul. Mapo was strategically important location for traffic and big port of Han-river. Many products which have delivered in the han-river have shared at Mapo. Po in Korean language means a port and harbor. According to it, Mapo was strategically important location for traffic and many shares through the Mapo delivered in each gegion. Since the Chosun Dynasty, many people lived in Mapo. There were also many famous restaurant. The many famous reataurant are the Kimchijjigae, Alaska pollack stews, cold noodles, and so on. Mapo is good at catching the City Hall and accessible to the airport. Mapo in seoul is the most hot place. Mapo apartment prices are increasingly going up. Especially My apartment complex is equipped with a sauna, swimming pool, gitness center, and golf indoor. Many apartment near my house is building now. The only weakness is that air is not very good. Anyway, would you like to live in here?

강사 첨삭

Hi sir,

 

Wow! so you live near a port. That must be interesting. I love seafood. Maybe, if given a chance I would love to live in a place like yours.

Take care!

~T. Lynn

 

I live in Ahyeondong, Mapo-gu(province) in Seoul.

>>correct!

Mapo was strategically important location for traffic and big port of Han-river.

>>Mapo is strategically important location for traffic and the big port of Han River.

Many products which have delivered in the han-river have shared at Mapo.

>> Many products which are delivered at the Han River is shared at Mapo.

Po in Korean language means a port and harbor.

>>correct!

According to it, Mapo was strategically important location for traffic and many shares through the Mapo delivered in each gegion.

>>According to (who?), Mapo was strategically important location for traffic and is used to deliver products in other regions.

Since the Chosun Dynasty, many people lived in Mapo.

>>correct!

There were also many famous restaurant.

>>There are also many famous restaurants here.

The many famous reataurant are the Kimchijjigae, Alaska pollack stews, cold noodles, and so on.

>>The restaurants serve Kimchichigae, Alaska pollack stew, cold noodles, and so on.

Mapo is good at catching the City Hall and accessible to the airport.

>> Mapo is near the city hall and is very accessible from the airport.

Mapo in seoul is the most hot place.

>>Mapo in Seoul is the hottest place.

Mapo apartment prices are increasingly going up.

>>correct!

Especially My apartment complex is equipped with a sauna, swimming pool, gitness center, and golf indoor.

>> Especially my apartment complex which is equipped with a sauna, swimming pool, fitness center, and indoor golf.

Many apartment near my house is building now.

>> There are many apartments being built near my house now.

The only weakness is that air is not very good.

>>The only disadvantage is that the air is not very good here.

 Anyway, would you like to live in here?

>>correct!

 

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