Spending money on space or human health
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There are some things that are unclear below.
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~~ Teacher Sharon
People usually do not know about space.
>> People usually do not know much about space.
However, many scholars and researchers study about the benefits of space for human.
>> However, many scholars and researchers study about the benefits of space for humans.
On the other hand, people think that studying space is wasting money and so, they suggest spending money for human health.
>> On the other hand, people think that studying space is a waste of money and so, they suggest spending money on human health programs.
This essay will discuss whether spending money for human health is better idea than studying space for people or not and I would express my opinion as well.
>> This essay will discuss whether spending money on human health programs is a better idea for people than studying space and I would express my opinion as well.
Researching space is a quiet unknown area to people.
>> Researching space is a quiet and unknown area for people.
Since people do not know about Astonishment and they cannot feel it in real lives.
>> This is because people do not know about amazing things and they cannot feel it in their daily lives.
People can just look up stars and noon, and image for the future when the last day of the earth because we have heard that somedays we would go to other planet in order to survive.
>> People can just look up at the stars and the moon and imagine the future of the last day on earth because we have heard that someday, we would go to another planet in order to survive.
Therefore, the government or scholars think people should spend money on researching space for the future.
>> Correct
Others think that preparation for the future is less important than protection of the present.
>> Others think that preparation for the future is less important than the present.
Many people are dying because they cannot be cured nowadays.
>> Correct
If the government spend money on studying medicine or cure, people would get hope and be cured.
>> If the government spends money on studying medicine or cure, people would get hope and be cured.
I think both of opinions have merit.
>> I think both opinions have merit.
However, people cannot ignore the true that earth is dying and we need to prepare for the future.
>> However, people cannot ignore the truth that the earth is dying and we need to prepare for the future.
In conclusion, I agree that we should spend money on studying space for our decedents and the future.
>> In conclusion, I agree that we should spend money on studying space for our descendants and the future.
Furthermore, people should interest in space not only about stars but also the benefits for human
>> Furthermore, people should be interested in space, not only in stars, but also in the benefits for humans.
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