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Hey Jay,
Would you like to try ski jumping or other extreme sports? Why or why not?
~Lynn
People enjoy many sports and I also like many sports so this topic is very interesting.
>> correct!
I think \"ski jumping\" is the most dangerous sport because first, a player fly into the sky and should land on the declined face of the slope.
>> correct!
When I enjoyed the skiing last week, even though I just was skiing,contolling it at the high level slope is difficult.
>> When I enjoyed skiing last week, even though I was just skiing, controlling it at the high level slope was difficult.
If a ski jumping player make a mistake when he land on the surface,his legs would be broken,at the least.
>> If a ski jumping player make a mistake when he lands on the surface,his legs would be broken, at the least.
On the other hand,\"billiards \" is the safest sport by my thought.
>> On the other hand,\"billiards \" is the safest sport I think.
First of all,players are walking or sitting on their seats even when they are playing it hard.
>> correct!
This sport need a extreme concentration to solve the difficult position of the balls.
>> This sport needs extreme concentration to solve the difficult position of the balls.
I think it\'s just because two sports have a different characteristic for play
>> I think these two sports have different characteristics.
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