Sports day

2012-06-04 · 첨삭 강사 Nica

학생이 쓴 원문

today my school held a sports day. my class participated in jumping rope, dodge ball, maraton, tug of war and other things. first, we played kind of jumping maraton ( It's traditional spots in Korea) we got first on this game so we were very happy. but next game, we lost. and next game, we lost too.. so my classmates were very sad. but on jumping rope, we got second :) And on maraton we got first all time! so we could get third in while :)

강사 첨삭

Hi!! ^^ Thank you for your composition. You did a great job!  Anyway, I\'m happy to hear that you enjoyed your sport\'s day. Congratulation to ou and your classmates. I\'m so proud of you!  See you in class. T. Dianne Today my school held a sports day.>> Correct! My class participated in jumping rope, dodge ball, maraton, tug of war and other things. >> Correct!First, we played kind of jumping maraton ( It\'s traditional spots in Korea) >> First, we played a jumping marathon ( It\'s a traditional sports in Korea).We got first on this game so we were very happy. >> We won first on this game and we were very happy.but next game, we lost. and next game, we lost too.. >> But the next game we lost and also the next game too. So my classmates were very sad. >> Corect!But on jumping rope, we got second :) >> BUt on the game of jumping rope we were second :)And on maraton we got first all time! >> And on marathon we got first always.So we could get third in while :) >> So we can get third in some. :)

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