State of interest #2
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In particular, it is crucial to establish a Basic Plan in consideration of various stakeholders\' positions in the railway construction project. For effective project management and risk management, educations related to PMP certification have been taken for over a decade.
3. Please briefly summarize any volunteer or professional experience that you have which may help you succeed in planning.
The planning is to consider possible factors in advance and collect opinions from various stakeholders to make optimal policies or decisions. The main areas of work conducted in the Korea National Railway Authority (Afterward, KR) for about 15 years have included reviewing the national railway master plan at the government level, devising basic plans and feasibility studies for individual railway projects, and preliminary feasibility studies. Through this task, I learned practical field experiences in economic analysis, transportation engineering, decision-making methodologies, etc.
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Here\'s your 2nd edited composition, [이름]!
Cheers,
Jean~~
In particular, it is crucial to establish a Basic Plan in consideration of various stakeholders\' positions in the railway construction project.
>> correct
For effective project management and risk management, educations related to PMP certification have been taken for over a decade.
>> [This is grammatical but what is PMP? When you first mention a word, you have to write the full word and then the 2nd time you mention it, you can use the acronym, like PMP.]
3. Please briefly summarize any volunteer or professional experience that you have which may help you succeed in planning.
The planning is to consider possible factors in advance and collect opinions from various stakeholders to make optimal policies or decisions.
>> Planning is when we consider possible factors in advance and collect opinions from various stakeholders to make optimal policies or decisions.
The main areas of work conducted in the Korea National Railway Authority (Afterward, KR) for about 15 years have included reviewing the national railway master plan at the government level, devising basic plans and feasibility studies for individual railway projects, and preliminary feasibility studies.
>> The main areas of work that have been conducted in the Korea National Railway Authority (KR) for about 15 years include reviewing the national railway master plan at the government level, devising basic plans and feasibility studies for individual railway projects, and preliminary feasibility studies.
Through this task, I learned practical field experiences in economic analysis, transportation engineering, decision-making methodologies, etc.
>> Through these tasks, I learned practical field experiences in economic analysis, transportation engineering, decision-making methodologies, etc. [I\'m assuming you\'re referring to more than 1 task.]
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