State of interest #8

2021-02-27 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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My main research interest is to study the various effects caused by the railway infrastructure and development in a preliminary feasibility study. I am convinced that I am the right person to meet the MSc program requirements at the University of Alberta, and I can successfully adapt myself to the program. I truly hope that my application is considered as a positive way, and thank you for your attention.

강사 첨삭

Here\'s your 8th edited composition, [이름]!


Cheers,
Jean~~


My main research interest is to study the various effects caused by the railway infrastructure and development in a preliminary feasibility study. 
>> My main research interest is to study the various effects caused by the railway infrastructure and development in a preliminary feasibility study. 

I am convinced that I am the right person to meet the MSc program requirements at the University of Alberta, and I can successfully adapt myself to the program.
>> I am convinced that I am the right person for the MSc program at the University of Alberta, and I can successfully adapt myself to the program.
>> or: I am convinced that I have all the qualifications to successfully fulfill your requirements for the MSc program requirements at the University of Alberta, and I can adapt myself well to the program.

I truly hope that my application is considered as a positive way, and thank you for your attention.
>> Thank you for taking the time to read my application. I truly hope that my MSc application is considered favorably. Thank you again for the opportunity, and I look forward to speaking with you soon. 

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