Stay at home or go somewhere on Holiday.
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Hello sir,
I guess what you said is also true in our country. During the important holidays in our country like Christmas and Holy Week people used to go home to their hometowns to visit their parents or relatives. But now, they just go somewhere to shop or go swimming or visit other tourist destinations abroad. You are absolutely right! The world is changing and so with people!
Take care!
~T. Lynn
There are four major trational Holidays in Korea.
>> correct!
It is a lunar new year\'s day and Hansik(cold food festival), Dano, Chuseok(Korean thanksgiving day).
>> It is Lunar New Year\'s Day and Hansik, Dano, and Chuseok.
Now Hansik and Dano has declined considerably as a holiday.
>> correct!
Whereas lunar new year\'s day and Chuseok are still major Holiday.
>> Whereas Lunar New Year\'s Day and Chuseok are still major holidays.
At this time, many many people have used to visit their hometown.
>> During this time, many people used to visit their hometowns.
It is so called a mass exodus of population.
>> It is also called a mass exodus of population.
All roads were similar to the parking lot to go hometown.
>> All roads going to the hometowns were similar to a parking lot.
At that times, It takes much four times than usual.
>> At that time, it takes four times longer than the usual.
Nowaday, people who visit his(her) hometown were greatly declined.
>> Nowadays, people who visit their hometown greatly declined.
They travelled to rest somewhere and went abroad.
>> They travel to rest somewhere or go abroad.
At last Chuseok, overseas korean has the highest record in Incheon Airport.
>> Last Chuseok, Koreans going overseas has the highest record in Incheon Airport.
Is it to stay at home or go somewhere? In the past, people were obligated to visit their hometown.
>> correct!
But now, people changed.
>> correct!
They do what they want.
>> correct!
World is changing, and people is changing.
>> The world is changing and people are changing too.
OR>> The world is changing and people are changing with it.
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