Story of my life

2017-07-07 · 첨삭 강사 Eunice

학생이 쓴 원문

I grow up in the family very positive. They always give me power to do everything more hard. I always appreciate their love to me. So, I could acomplish so many things that I want. For example, I could go to university that I want. Also, I lived in Madrid during six months for study.

강사 첨삭

Good day [이름]!

Thank you for sending your composition. I revised some of your sentences and I hope that it would be a great help for you!

Anyway, Have a great time ahead. ^^

Enjoy your weekend!

~T. Eunice

I grow up in the family very positive.

>> I grew up in a very positive family.

They always give me power to do everything more hard.

>> They always encourage me to do everything I can.

I always appreciate their love to me.

>> I always appreciate their love for me.

>> I always appreciate their effort.

So, I could acomplish so many things that I want.

>> So that I could accomplish a lot of things that I want to do.

For example, I could go to university that I want.

>> For example, I could go to the university that I want.

Also, I lived in Madrid during six months for study.

>> I also lived in Madrid for six months to study.

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