Stress relief: schools build special zone to reduce student anxiety
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1. What can you say about the “Stress-Free Zones” program in six schools in Seoul?
This is very good news and nice attempt to relieve student\'s stress in Seoul.
>> This is very good news and a nice attempt to relieve student\'s stress in Seoul.
However, for the different view, this is so sad story because this means also there are so much stressful student in Seoul.
>> However, for the different view, this is a sad story. Because, this means that there are so much stressful students in Seoul.
2. What realistic changes would you make to your country\'s attitude toward education?
I think it need more new insight for competition system in Korea.
>> I think we need more new insights for the competition system in Korea.
Many Koreans naturally have a characteristics \"compare to other people\".
>> A lot of Koreans naturally have a character to \"compare people with others\"
That means he or she can see themselves by compare with each other. Korean has fundamentally this character, so the education competition can\'t be solved.
>> That means he or she can see themselves by comparing with each other. Koreans fundamentally has this character, so the education competition can\'t be solved.
3. What other programs can the Seoul Metropolitan Government offer to help overburdened children?
I think it need a limitation policy about children\'s tuition time.
>> I think it needs a limitation policy about children\'s tuition time.
Thesedays student study time in school in Korea is so burden to student especially to high shcool student.
>> Students has study times in school in Korea is a burden to students especially high shcool students these days.
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