\"Students need longer holidays\", do you agree with this statement? Why or why not?

2020-02-17 · 첨삭 강사 Eve

학생이 쓴 원문

The way i see it, yes. i agree. Cuz when they are Students have to go through many situations. people grow up when they get wounded and healing process. that is a system of body and mind. also As a students, it is a actively period of physical and mental growth. They look like a sponges, they absorb to everything what they experienced. it\'s good or bad that will be great nourishment for their life. so what can we do how do they new more experience than before? The answer is extending holiday! when i was younger, my high school and education system was so awful we had to go to school 7 am and study until 5 pm. I felt school like prison, I always dreamed escape from class room. And I always regret that I haven\'t enjoyed in passed time. So I don\'t want to lost time of students from school anymore. long holidays would give more happiness to students. holidays maketh a man!

강사 첨삭

The last part of your essay was hilarious!

I definitely agree.

Students need more time to discover more of themselves.

Great point today!

Aja aja!

~Teacher Eve.    

The way i see it, yes. i agree.

>> The way I see it, yes, I agree.
 Cuz when they are Students have to go through many situations.

>> Because students have to go through many situations.
 people grow up when they get wounded and healing process.

>> People grow up whenever they get wounded, healing process comes afterwards.
 that is a system of body and mind.

>> That is the system of our body and mind.
 also As a students, it is a actively period of physical and mental growth.

>> Also, students are undergoing an active period of physical and mental growth.
 They look like a sponges, they absorb to everything what they experienced.

>> They are like sponges, they absorb everything that they experience.
 it\'s good or bad

>> It\'s good or bad.
 that will be great nourishment for their life.

>> That will be a great nourishment for their life.
 so what can we do how do they new more experience than before?

>> So what can we do for them to have more new experiences than before?
 The answer is extending holiday!

>> The answer is by extending the holiday!
 when i was younger, my high school and education system was so awful

>> When I was younger, my high school\'s educational system was awful.
 we had to go to school 7 am and study until 5 pm.

>> We had to go to school at 7 AM and study until 5 PM.
 I felt school like prison, I always dreamed escape from class room.

>> I felt school was like a prison. I always dream of escaping the classroom.
 And I always regret that I haven\'t enjoyed in passed time.

>> And I always regret that I haven\'t enjoyed much of my pass time.
 So I don\'t want to lost time of students from school anymore.

>> So I don\'t want students to lose time anymore.
 long holidays would give more happiness to students.

>> Long holidays would give students more happiness.
 holidays maketh a man!

>> Correct!

파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.

다른 영어첨삭교정 보기

영어첨삭교정 ·