\"Students need longer holidays\", do you agree with this statement? Why or why not?
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The last part of your essay was hilarious!
I definitely agree.
Students need more time to discover more of themselves.
Great point today!
Aja aja!
~Teacher Eve.
The way i see it, yes. i agree.
>> The way I see it, yes, I agree.
Cuz when they are Students have to go through many situations.
>> Because students have to go through many situations.
people grow up when they get wounded and healing process.
>> People grow up whenever they get wounded, healing process comes afterwards.
that is a system of body and mind.
>> That is the system of our body and mind.
also As a students, it is a actively period of physical and mental growth.
>> Also, students are undergoing an active period of physical and mental growth.
They look like a sponges, they absorb to everything what they experienced.
>> They are like sponges, they absorb everything that they experience.
it\'s good or bad
>> It\'s good or bad.
that will be great nourishment for their life.
>> That will be a great nourishment for their life.
so what can we do how do they new more experience than before?
>> So what can we do for them to have more new experiences than before?
The answer is extending holiday!
>> The answer is by extending the holiday!
when i was younger, my high school and education system was so awful
>> When I was younger, my high school\'s educational system was awful.
we had to go to school 7 am and study until 5 pm.
>> We had to go to school at 7 AM and study until 5 PM.
I felt school like prison, I always dreamed escape from class room.
>> I felt school was like a prison. I always dream of escaping the classroom.
And I always regret that I haven\'t enjoyed in passed time.
>> And I always regret that I haven\'t enjoyed much of my pass time.
So I don\'t want to lost time of students from school anymore.
>> So I don\'t want students to lose time anymore.
long holidays would give more happiness to students.
>> Long holidays would give students more happiness.
holidays maketh a man!
>> Correct!
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