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학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
So here is the continuation, Miss. [Name]^^
Thank you for doing your best in translating this paragraph into English^^
Hanul thought of Sicheonju(侍天主) emphasizes that everything contains the whole universe and means the whole universe, big self, or the evolution of universe.
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All of these are referred to as the human beings of universe by Lee Don-hwa.
>>CORRECT!
It expresses the healing of everything and saving all life as progressive ideology.
>>It expresses the healing of everything and saving all live as progressive ideology.
The disease of the world comes from human selfishness of separation.
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So the liberation from this comes from the awareness of Hanul, and it is the healing activity that liberates man, society, and all life.
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And it is the evolution of Hanul who constantly wants to improve.
>>And it is the evolution of Hanul which constantly wants to improve.
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