success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful

I think being success in life taking risks or chances id more important than careful planning. Yes, I agree with good planning is important to success. however even if someone has a really good plan, but he/she doesn't take any risks or has a very bad luck, it is hard to success. For example, If Steve Jobs didn't take any ricks such as gave up his college, fired from his own company, He couldn't have a chance to success in Apple and Pixar company. He believe his ways and ability, then do not hesitate to go totally new way where no one try to go, he could get more than other people. That's why I think taking risk is more important than planning.

Hello [이름]! ^^   Splendid job in writing your essay. You are getting so much better and most of the corrections are minor reiterations concerning vocabulary and ounctuation. Although, check out the fourth correction wherein there are two versions of it; one making use of expressions that make the sentence shorter. This illustrates the usage of common expressions; it saves you time. ^^ Also the last correction where it\'s okay to use the contraction of \"that is\" but to emphasize your point, the complete form is advisable. ~~   Excited for our class, ==Teacher Charlie==     I think being success in life taking risks or chances id more important than careful planning. >> I think achieving success in life by taking risks or chances is more important than careful planning. Yes, I agree with good planning is important to success. however even if someone has a really good plan, but he/she doesn\'t take any risks or has a very bad luck, it is hard to success.>> Yes, I agree that good planning is important to achieve success, however, even if one has a really good plan but doesn\'t take any risks or is exremely unlucky than it is hard to attain prosperity. For example, If Steve Jobs didn\'t take any ricks such as gave up his college, fired from his own company, He couldn\'t have a chance to success in Apple and Pixar company. >> For example, if Steve Jobs didn\'t take any risks like dropping out of school and getting fired from his own company, he wouldn\'t have had the chance to be successful in both Apple and Pixar company.   He believe his ways and ability, then do not hesitate to go totally new way where no one try to go, he could get more than other people.>> He believed in his ways as well as his ability and did not hesitate to try out a new way that no one has ever dared to so he would be at an advantage.  >>OR: He believed in his ways as well as his ability and did not hesitate to take the path less traveled so he could get ahead.  That\'s why I think taking risk is more important than planning. >> That is why I think taking risks is more important than careful planning.