Successful career and happy family life
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hello sir,
An excellent composition sir! Let me borrow a passage from the Bible today sir. It says, \" No one can serve two masters. Either you will hate the one and love the other, or you will be devoted to the one and despise the other.\" I guess, this is true about a successful career and a happy family life. Anyway, It\'s good that you finally found a way to balance the two. Se you tomorrow in class sir!
Take care!
~T. Lynn
I carefully think what was and am I working for and why should I do work.
>>I carefully thought of what was and I am working for and why should I work.
For my family, for my wife, for my sons, for me?
>>correct!
I strongly thought I should work for my family before that.
>>correct!
But now, I am working for me and I\'d like to work for me.
>>correct!
That is very important.
>>correct!
To work for family involves a successful career.
>>correct!
Because the work is a strong tendency to show a other person.
>>Because at work a person has the tendency to show off to another person.
In that case, there is no right way to success.
>>In that case,that\'s not the right way to succeed.
The person will accomplish their purpose by fair means or foul(by hook or by crock).
>>correct!
I seemed to work like that until 40s years old.
>>I seemed to work like that until I was in my 40s.
But when I was a 50s years old, I changed a little my thought about work.
>>But when I turned 50, I changed my thought about work a little.
I started to feel fun what I am doing.
>>I started to feel fun with what I am doing.
And I started to work for me.
>>correct!
Thereupon, I spend much more time with my family.
>>correct!
My sife and sons liked my changed and new self.
>>correct! (misspelled: wife)
A successful career and a happy family life, I don\'t know which one is better.
>>correct!
What is clear is that all person can\'t take two choices.
>>What is clear is that all people can\'t have the two choices.
That is a problem.
>>That is the problem.
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