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They have totally 5 process to create the power.
In the first section, after influx of water, it falls down to the underground through the 4.5km pump. Secondly, they move into the Geothermal zone which is composed by heated rocks and flow along the road of it. This second path is called the injection well.
Next step is the production well which is opposite way which heats water and take it up to the ground compared with first step. At this time, the steam is made in Condenser and we can call this \"the forth process.\"
Finally, seam get into the other container through the thin path and turbine in the next box which start to work cased by the fume.
After that Generator is turned on and it translates the made storm to energy which called electricity.
We can use this power from the tower which received the translated energy.
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They have totally 5 process to create the power.>> They have a total of 5 processes to create the power.
In the first section, after influx of water, it falls down to the underground through the 4.5km pump.
In the first section, after influx of water, it falls down to the underground through the 4.5km pump.
>> In the first section, after the influx of water, it falls down to the underground through the 4.5 km pump.
Secondly, they move into the Geothermal zone which is composed by heated rocks and flow along the road of it.
>> Secondly, they move into the Geothermal zone which is composed by heated rocks and flow along the road ON it.
This second path is called the injection well.
>> CORRECT
Next step is the production well which is opposite way which heats water and take it up to the ground compared with first step.
Next step is the production well which is opposite way which heats water and take it up to the ground compared with first step.
>> Next step is the production well which is THE opposite way THAT heats water and TAKES it up to the ground, compared with THE first step.
At this time, the steam is made in Condenser and we can call this \"the forth process.\"
>> Incorrect spelling of forth. It should be fourth.
>> CORRECT Grammar
Finally, seam get into the other container through the thin path and turbine in the next box which start to work cased by the fume.
Finally, seam get into the other container through the thin path and turbine in the next box which start to work cased by the fume.
>> Finally, THE seam gets into the other container through the thin path and THE turbine INTO the next box which starts to work CAUSED by the fume.
After that Generator is turned on and it translates the made storm to energy which called electricity.
After that Generator is turned on and it translates the made storm to energy which called electricity.
>> After that, the generator is turned on and it CONVERTS the made storm to energy which IS called electricity.
We can use this power from the tower which received the translated energy.
>> We can use this power from the tower THAT receives the CONVERTED energy.
We can use this power from the tower which received the translated energy.
>> We can use this power from the tower THAT receives the CONVERTED energy.
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