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2019-10-08 · 첨삭 강사 May

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There are totally 10 countries in this graph. First of all, China is the most highest group in this analysis. They have over five times amount of it than other countries which from Russia to Korea, rep. Also, both their production and consumption of electricity is almost same and thier rates are relatively 5,398 and 5,322. Secondly, the United States is under China and their consumption and production are as much as same each other. They have also high level of using and their rates are likely 4,000 and it\'s four times over than the third countrt:Russia. The more they have great citizens, the more they use the electricity. Unless other countries have little change according to their number, these groups which is between three to ten have approximately same rates compared with China and US. We don\'t know hiw these have changed for now, its rates will be more likely to raising in the future. / When I was a high school student, I was really mean. After realizing that was bad, I changed.

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~~Teacher May~~

There are totally 10 countries in this graph.

>> There is a total of 10 countries in this graph.
First of all, China is the most highest group in this analysis.

>> Based on the analysis, China is the highest.

They have over five times amount of it than other countries which from Russia to Korea, rep.

>> They have over five times amount higher than other the countries like Russia and Korea.
Also, both their production and consumption of electricity is almost same and thier rates are relatively 5,398 and 5,322.

>> Also, their production and consumption of electricity are almost the same and their rates are relatively 5,398 and 5,322.
Secondly, the United States is under China and their consumption and production are as much as same each other.

>> Secondly, the United States is under China and their consumption and production are almost the same with each other.

They have also high level of using and their rates are likely 4,000 and it\'s four times over than the third countrt:Russia.

>> They also have a high level of usage and their rates are likely 4,000 and it\'s four times higher than the third country which is Russia.
The more they have great citizens, the more they use the electricity.

>> CORRECT

OR >> The higher the number of great citizens, the more they use the electricity.
Unless other countries have little change according to their number, these groups which is between three to ten have approximately same rates compared with China and US.

>> Unless, if other countries have little change according to their number, these groups which is between three to ten have approximately the same rates compared with China and the US.A
We don\'t know hiw these have changed for now, its rates will be more likely to raising in the future.

>> We don\'t know how these have changed for now, whether its rates will be more likely to raise in the future.
/ When I was a high school student, I was really mean.

>> CORRECT

After realizing that was bad, I changed.

>> After realizing that it was bad, I\'ve changed.

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