Summary 1
학생이 쓴 원문
Today’s article is a story about a certain man who is going to take a paternity leave for one year to care for his newborn twins.
It seems to be a tough decision to take 12 months off. Because he is working as a software engineer in Seoul. And more the information technology business is so competitive and rapidly changing.
After finishing his vacation for caring for his baby, He may have difficulty readjusting himself to work.
But, He said that his wife and he never want to miss the precious moment with their babies.
The most interesting story in the article is the leave incentive.
I have not heard about the incentive when parent have a long term vacation for caring for newborn baby. Thanks for the system,
They now receive up to 1 million won a month in financial subsidy for one year.
I think that the reason why Korea government has been supporting newborn baby’s parents is related to low birthrate in Korea
Korea is suffering from low birthrate.
강사 첨삭
Hello Mr. [Name]!
I enjoyed our discussion today.
We had an interesting topic to talk about.
And thanks for sending your composition.
It is good to know that you used your free time to be able to make this.
Hope you will be okay today.
Take care and see you again tomorrow!
Always,
Kathrine ^^
Today’s article is a story about a certain man who is going to take a paternity leave for one year to care for his newborn twins.
>> correct!
It seems to be a tough decision to take 12 months off.
>> correct!
Because he is working as a software engineer in Seoul.
>> correct!
And more the information technology business is so competitive and rapidly changing.
>> correct!
After finishing his vacation for caring for his baby, He may have difficulty readjusting himself to work.
>> After finishing his vacation to take care of his baby, he may have a difficulty readjusting himself to work.
But, He said that his wife and he never want to miss the precious moment with their babies.
>> But, he said that he and his wife would never want to miss the precious moment with their babies.
The most interesting story in the article is the leave incentive.
>> correct!
I have not heard about the incentive when parent have a long term vacation for caring for newborn baby.
>> I have not heard about the incentive when a parent has to have a long term vacation to take care for a newborn baby.
Thanks for the system, They now receive up to 1 million won a month in financial subsidy for one year.
>> Thanks for the system, they can now receive up to 1 million won a month as a financial subsidy for one year.
I think that the reason why Korea government has been supporting newborn baby’s parents is related to low birthrate in Korea
>> I think that the reason why Korean government has been supporting newborn baby\'s parents is related to the low birthrate in Korea.
Korea is suffering from low birthrate.
>> correct!
I enjoyed our discussion today.
We had an interesting topic to talk about.
And thanks for sending your composition.
It is good to know that you used your free time to be able to make this.
Hope you will be okay today.
Take care and see you again tomorrow!
Always,
Kathrine ^^
Today’s article is a story about a certain man who is going to take a paternity leave for one year to care for his newborn twins.
>> correct!
It seems to be a tough decision to take 12 months off.
>> correct!
Because he is working as a software engineer in Seoul.
>> correct!
And more the information technology business is so competitive and rapidly changing.
>> correct!
After finishing his vacation for caring for his baby, He may have difficulty readjusting himself to work.
>> After finishing his vacation to take care of his baby, he may have a difficulty readjusting himself to work.
But, He said that his wife and he never want to miss the precious moment with their babies.
>> But, he said that he and his wife would never want to miss the precious moment with their babies.
The most interesting story in the article is the leave incentive.
>> correct!
I have not heard about the incentive when parent have a long term vacation for caring for newborn baby.
>> I have not heard about the incentive when a parent has to have a long term vacation to take care for a newborn baby.
Thanks for the system, They now receive up to 1 million won a month in financial subsidy for one year.
>> Thanks for the system, they can now receive up to 1 million won a month as a financial subsidy for one year.
I think that the reason why Korea government has been supporting newborn baby’s parents is related to low birthrate in Korea
>> I think that the reason why Korean government has been supporting newborn baby\'s parents is related to the low birthrate in Korea.
Korea is suffering from low birthrate.
>> correct!
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