Summary 2
학생이 쓴 원문
So, The Korean government has been trying to boost the nation’s low birthrate through various measures now.
In my opinion, the leave incentive will be a good measure to overcome low birthrate.
But, Unfortunately, The paternity leave can be used only in a public institution
It is very difficult to get the paternity leave in private enterprise.
If someone takes a one year paternity leave, He will be laid off after return.
My conclusion is that “What a brave man is”
강사 첨삭
Hello again Mr. [Name]!
And here is the continuation of my corrections too.
You pointed out your thoughts very well so god job!
See you next time!
Always,
Kathrine ^^
So, The Korean government has been trying to boost the nation’s low birthrate through various measures now.
>> correct!
In my opinion, the leave incentive will be a good measure to overcome low birthrate.
>> correct!
But, Unfortunately, The paternity leave can be used only in a public institution
>> But, unfortunately, paternity leave can only be used by public institutions.
It is very difficult to get the paternity leave in private enterprise.
>> It is very difficult to get a paternity leave in private enterprises.
If someone takes a one year paternity leave, He will be laid off after return.
>> If someone takes a/one year paternity leave, he will be laid off after he returns.
My conclusion is that “What a brave man is”
>> My conclusion is that, what a brave man is he!
And here is the continuation of my corrections too.
You pointed out your thoughts very well so god job!
See you next time!
Always,
Kathrine ^^
So, The Korean government has been trying to boost the nation’s low birthrate through various measures now.
>> correct!
In my opinion, the leave incentive will be a good measure to overcome low birthrate.
>> correct!
But, Unfortunately, The paternity leave can be used only in a public institution
>> But, unfortunately, paternity leave can only be used by public institutions.
It is very difficult to get the paternity leave in private enterprise.
>> It is very difficult to get a paternity leave in private enterprises.
If someone takes a one year paternity leave, He will be laid off after return.
>> If someone takes a/one year paternity leave, he will be laid off after he returns.
My conclusion is that “What a brave man is”
>> My conclusion is that, what a brave man is he!
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