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2017-08-31 · 첨삭 강사 Jane

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Title: National health insurance to offer greater coverage for pregnancy and childbirth. Korea is the lowest birthrate in the world. The ministry of health and welfare said it'll give the graded incentive to all pregnancy form 200 to 900 dollar. This is because the authotories encourages the women through a childbirth grant policy but they don't want to have over two children. Bringing up the only one child has a lot of money until adult. It coasts over one hundred millin for a child because of the fee of private education.

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Title: National health insurance to offer greater coverage for pregnancy and childbirth.

>> Correct

Korea is the lowest birthrate in the world.

>> Korea has the lowest birthrate in the world.

The ministry of health and welfare said it\'ll give the graded incentive to all pregnancy form 200 to 900 dollar.

>> The Ministry of Health and Welfare said it\'ll give the graded incentive to all pregnancies from 200 to 900 dollars. 

This is because the authotories encourages the women through a childbirth grant policy but they don\'t want to have over two children.

>> This is because the authorities encourage women through a childbirth grant policy, but they don\'t want to have more than two children. 

Bringing up the only one child has a lot of money until adult.

>> Bringing up just one child requires much money until s/he grows into an adult. 

It coasts over one hundred millin for a child because of the fee of private education.

>> It costs over one hundred million for a child because of the fee for private education.

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