summary writing 01
학생이 쓴 원문
The usefulness of power generation harnessing wave seems controversial. The article is optimistic about the technology, while the lecturer argues about it. There are three points. First, the article saids the system is constant and it is reliable. The annual pattern of tide is routinized so that the amount of energy we can earn can be estimated and anticipated. However the lecturer think it is naïve to miss the fact that machines can break down in harsh environment. Moreover, article said it is environmenatally friendly since it dose not burn fossile fule, but lecturer insists that the chemical lubricators are harmful instead. Finally, lecturer argues the ‘not disturbing the view’ idea with the facts that the system should be colored bright for safety of ships passingby and that those machines are placed near the coast line. Therefor it is hard to say that wave farm has no problems.
강사 첨삭
Hi Haeyoon! Good job for making summarizing the article. However, you need to be very careful because missing punctuation marks can make your sentences wrong. Also, check your spelling, okay? Anyway, keep it up!
~Teacher Nova
The usefulness of power generation harnessing wave seems controversial. >> Correct
>> OR: The advantage of power generation harnessing wave seems controversial.
The article is optimistic about the technology, while the lecturer argues about it.
>> The article is optimistic about technology. However, the lecturer argues about it.
There are three points.
>> Correct
First, the article saids the system is constant and it is reliable.
>> First, the article said (that) the system is constant and reliable.
The annual pattern of tide is routinized so that the amount of energy we can earn can be estimated and anticipated.
>> The annual pattern of tide is routinized so that the amount of energy that can be obtain will be estimated and anticipated.
However the lecturer think it is naïve to miss the fact that machines can break down in harsh environment.
>> However, the lecturer thinks it is natural to miss the fact that machines can break down and damage the environment.
Moreover, article said it is environmenatally friendly since it dose not burn fossile fule, but lecturer insists that the chemical lubricators are harmful instead.
>> Moreover, the article said it is environmentally friendly since it dose not burn fossil fuel though the lecturer still insists that the chemical lubricators are harmful.
Finally, lecturer argues the ‘not disturbing the view’ idea with the facts that the system should be colored bright for safety of ships passingby and that those machines are placed near the coast line.
>> Finally, lecturer argues the ‘not disturbing the view’ idea with the facts that the system should be brightly colored for safety of ships passing by and that those machines are placed near the coast line.
Therefor it is hard to say that wave farm has no problems.
>> Therefore, it is hard to say that wave farm doesn\'t\' have disadvantages.
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