Summer Vacation!!

2021-07-17 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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Theme: [ESSAY] What do you think is the best way to spend summer vacation? I think it is to read books that I like and spend many times with my parents. In my case, I love reading Harry Potter, Secret Garden, Ivy&Bean. I read that books when I am stressed. Then, I became happy! I think on vacation, students have to be happy. So, read! We can read with our parents, too!

강사 첨삭

Here\'s your last corrected composition this week, [이름]!
Have a lovely weekend. 

Cheers,
Jean~~


                            Theme: [ESSAY] What do you think is the best way to spend summer vacation?


I think it is to read books that I like and spend many times with my parents.
>> I think reading books and spending most of my time with my parents are my preferences. 

In my case, I love reading Harry Potter, Secret Garden, Ivy&Bean.
>> OR: As for me, I love reading Harry Potter, Secret Garden, and Ivy&Bean.

I read that books when I am stressed. Then, I became happy!
>> I read these books when I am stressed because I become happy after. 

I think on vacation, students have to be happy.
>> I think students have to be happy when they\'re on vacation. 
>> OR: If you asked me, I believe that during vacation, students should have fun and be happy.

So, read!
We can read with our parents, too!
>> CORRECT~~
>> OR: We can read with our parents as well. So, read!

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