Sun
학생이 쓴 원문
Sun
강사 첨삭
Hi, Andrew! I think it was cute that in your short story, you decided to follow and play with the son and his father. ^_^ However, I did notice that the sun was missing in this story. My suggestion is you can place it at the beginning by saying, for example, \"It was a warm, sunny day. A perfect day to go outside.\" and then you see the father and son walking. ^^ Aside from that, please don\'t forget to adjust your words if they\'re already finished~ (Example: follow -> followed, look -> looked) Thank you! :)
~T.Harmony <3
>> I saw a son walking with his dad.
I follow them.
>> I followed them.
They was playing at playground.
>> They were playing at the playground.
It look very fun!
>> It looked very fun!
I want to play too.
>> I wanted to play too.
So I played with them.
>> CORRECT!
It was very fun!
>> CORRECT!
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