Sunday, Aug 15th, 2010 Sunny
학생이 쓴 원문
I met my friends today. I have four close friends in the middle school days. We decided to appointment before appointed day dawn. One of my friends already had another schedule. So I appointed three friends. After I was sleep, I went to appointed place where I lived in 9 years. They live same village except me. because I moved to other country last year.
However I met two of them. the other friend canceled our appointment without warning. She was dismissed four months ago and after few weeks, she was employed small and medium enterprise. Unfortunately she quited her job because her director. After that she tried to get a new job until now. Currently she tend to make appointment actively, and then she suddenly canceled. I could understand her mind but I couldn't understand her action.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름],
I understand that you are a little bit upset with your friend but
maybe an emergency situation came up so she didn’t make it.
Great diary =))
See you tonight ,
Connie
I met my friends today.
>> Correct^^
I have four close friends in the middle school days.
>> I have four close friends from the middle school days.
We decided to appointment before appointed day dawn.
>> We made an appointment this dawn.
One of my friends already had another schedule.
>> Correct^^
So I appointed three friends.
>> So just three of my friends showed up.
After I was sleep, I went to appointed place where I lived in 9 years.
>> Upon waking up, I went to our meeting place where I lived for 9 years.
They live same village except me. because I moved to other country last year.
>> They live in the same village except for me, because I moved to other place last year. However I met two of them.
>> Correct^^
the other friend canceled our appointment without warning.
>> The other friend cancelled our appointment without any notices.
She was dismissed four months ago and after few weeks, she was employed small and medium enterprise.
>> She finished her class four months ago and after few weeks, she was employed in a medium enterprise.
Unfortunately she quited her job because her director.
>> Unfortunately, she quit her job because of her director.
After that she tried to get a new job until now.
>> So she is trying to get a new job now.
Currently she tend to make appointment actively, and then she suddenly canceled.
>> She made an appointment with us and she cancelled it suddenly.
I could understand her mind but I couldn't understand her action.
>> I can understand what her mind but not her action.
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