superaged
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I think that the superaged society will drop social production ability.
The government should focus on the welfare and safty of the senior than challengable policies.
The young generation should be burden the senior\'s pention even they don\'t want to do.
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Hello Ms. [이름], it\'s a great day today!
I completely agree with your opinion that the government should prioritize the needs of the people. By doing so, it could help address the issue of low birth rates and other social problems. Sometimes, the government creates policies that they believe will benefit everyone, but in reality, it only serves to increase their popularity.
Best regards,
Aki.
I think that the superaged society will drop social production ability.
>>> CORRECT!
The government should focus on the welfare and safty of the senior than challengable policies.
>>> The government should focus on the welfare and safety of the seniors rather than challenging policies.
The young generation should be burden the senior\'s pention even they don\'t want to do.
>>> The young generation should burden the senior\'s pension even if they don\'t want to do it.
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