Supernature things

2017-08-18 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

I am interested in supernature things. What is supernature things? I think, in other words, it is the God. People commonly believe that God is the only one. But I don't think so. East Asia is Chinese character cultural sphere. Each country's language is included in Chinese character. In Chinese language, the God read as 神(sin). Ancient Chinese is hieroglyphic. 神(the God) is compound word of ghost and lightning. For ancient people, lightning was a supernature phenomenon. They believe that supernature phenomenons were made by the God. For example, rain, wind, thunder, water, fire have each own's spirit and the God. These all phenomenon which human can't make was worshiped by the man. All objects of worship were the Gods. As science developed, these thinking changed. The science start to prove and study one by one every phenomenon.

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]!
As a Christian, we were made to believe that there is only ONE God. But I believe that there are many things and happenings around us which cannot be explained by rational mind or science. Thank you for answering your homework. See you on Monday!
Take care!
~T. Lynn
I am interested in supernature things.
>> I am interested in supernatural things.
What is supernature things?
>>
What is supernatural things?
I think, in other words, it is the God.
>> I think, in other words it is about God.
People commonly believe that God is the only one.
>> correct!
But I don\'t think so. East Asia is Chinese character cultural sphere.
>>
But I don\'t think so. East Asia is a Chinese character cultural sphere.
Each country\'s language is included in Chinese character.
>> correct!
In Chinese language, the God read as 神(sin).
>>
In Chinese language, God is read as 神(sin).
Ancient Chinese is hieroglyphic.
>>
Ancient Chinese used hieroglyphics.
 神(the God) is compound word of ghost and lightning.
>> correct!
For ancient people, lightning was a supernature phenomenon.
>>
For ancient people, lightning was a supernatural phenomenon.
They believe that supernature phenomenons were made by the God.
>>
They believe that supernatural phenomenons were made by God.
For example, rain, wind, thunder, water, fire have each own\'s spirit and the God.
>>
For example, rain, wind, thunder, water, fire have it\'s own spirit and god.
These all phenomenon which human can\'t make was worshiped by the man.
>> All these phenomenon which humans can\'t make was worshiped by man.
 All objects of worship were the Gods.
>> All objects of worship were called gods.
As science developed, this thinking changed.
>> correct!
The science start to prove and study one by one every phenomenon.
>> Science started to prove and study each phenomenon.

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