superpowerman (1) Mark's superpower

Mark is an ordinary student which goes to Seoul elementary school. One day in the winter he really didn't want to go to school so he thought" Today, I hope it snows very much. Then, I will not go to school because of the high amount of snow. Suddenly, it began to rain and in the radio it says that " In seoul, there are a lot of snow falling. So, the government said students in seoul doesn't need to go to school. Mark was very happy that he didn't need to go to school. Also he was very surprised because of his superpower. Then he wished "I want warm weather and the snow melting" Then...

Hi Joey! I like your composition. It reminded me of myself when I was your age.   But if you come to think of it, it's better not to have any delays in class so you won't have to make up for it, plus, all lesson learned would still be fresh in your memory. Don't you think?       Mark is an ordinary student which goes to Seoul elementary school. >>Mark is an ordinary student who goes to Seoul elementary school. One day in the winter he really didn't want to go to school so he thought" Today, I hope it snows very much. >>One day in the winter he really didn't want to go to school so he thought, "I hope it snows heavily today". Then, I will not go to school because of the high amount of snow.>>Then, I will not go to school because of the heavy snow. Suddenly, it began to rain and in the radio it says that " In seoul, there are a lot of snow falling. >>Suddenly, it began to rain and there was an announcement in the radio saying there's a lot of snow falling in Seoul.  So, the government said students in seoul doesn't need to go to school.>>So the government declared that students in Seoul has no class. Mark was very happy that he didn't need to go to school. Also he was very surprised because of his superpower. >>Mark was very happy that he didn't need to go to school. Also he was very surprised with his superpower. Then he wished "I want warm weather and the snow melting" >>Then he wished,"I want a warm weather to melt the snow"Then... >> correct