Supervised Night Self-Study(1/2)
학생이 쓴 원문
The proper purpose of school education is to encourage students to be human being. In this sense, the supervised night self-study is problematic because its educational means indicate the coercion of studying and unquestioning obedience. Moreover, the program provides students with less free time with their friends and family and limitation of students’ right to autonomous learning.
Most people who succeed in their lives have social skills by spending much time with their friends and family than studying all night long. That is, the implementation of night self-study is not beneficial in students’ future. For example, it is easy to find someone who has a problem with interaction with others, and also discover that most of people like him/her only had studied in the school before. On the contrary, people who spent hanging out with various friends or having great time with their family have no problem with whatever they do.
강사 첨삭
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-Teacher Chloe
The proper purpose of school education is to encourage students to be human being.
>> The proper purpose of school education is to encourage students to be human beings.
In this sense, the supervised night self-study is problematic because its educational means indicate the coercion of studying and unquestioning obedience.
>>Correct
Moreover, the program provides students with less free time with their friends and family and limitation of students right to autonomous learning.
>>Correct Most people who succeed in their lives have social skills by spending much time with their friends and family than studying all night long.
>>Correct
That is, the implementation of night self-study is not beneficial in students future.
>>In my own opinion, the implementation of self-study in the future is not beneficial.
For example, it is easy to find someone who has a problem with interaction with others, and also discover that most of people like him/her only had studied in the school before.
>>Correct
On the contrary, people who spent hanging out with various friends or having great time with their family have no problem with whatever they do.
>> On the contrary, people who spent most of their time hanging out with their various friends or having great time with their family do not have any problems with whatever they do.
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