Supervised Night Self-Study(2/2)

2012-08-14 · 첨삭 강사 Chloe

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No one wants to work throughout the night. If someone is imposed to extend to work all night, he/she claims their right to have a free time. In this way, afterschool self-study which limits students’ rights in their autonomous learning does not make sense. According to under the article 3 of Student Right Act, students are able to exercise their right in their studying after school. Therefore, schools do not conduct the night self-study program by force. In conclusion, a lot of schools implement the supervised night self-study these days regardless of its disadvantages and legislations. Those schools should consider these in true education and cease the program as soon as possible for students’future.

강사 첨삭

Hey brother! Your ideas are really brilliant. I can say that you were able to support your stand for the issue. But, how come you do self-study late at night or the whole night? Well, in fact, it opposses your stand. I think you have to explain to me. Haha! I will talk to you later! Enjoy your night! -Teacher Chloe No one wants to work throughout the night. >>Correct >>No one wants to study througout the night. If someone is imposed to extend to work all night, he/she claims their right to have a free time. >>If someone is imposed to extend to work all night or study all night, he/she claims his/her right to have a free time. In this way, afterschool self-study which limits students rights in their autonomous learning does not make sense. >>In this case, afterschool self-study which limits students rights in their autonomous learning does not make sense. According to under the article 3 of Student Right Act, students are able to exercise their right in their studying after school. Therefore, schools do not conduct the night self-study program by force. >>CorrectIn conclusion, a lot of schools implement the supervised night self-study these days regardless of its disadvantages and legislations. >>Correct Those schools should consider these in true education and cease the program as soon as possible for students future. >> Those schools should consider these in true education and cease the program as soon as possible for students' future.    

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