Support for people with Parkinson\'s disease
학생이 쓴 원문
After taking my friend to the clinic, I checked some grants or subsidies from our government. I was surprised at various support for the people with Parkinson\'s disease. Those who are diagnosed with the disease but can\'t afford to buy some medications or get continued treatment like my friend can get financial support: over one million won monthly. In addition, those who can\'t work with the disease will be given support from local government. Their debts will be reduced or removed.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Gi [이름]!
The more you tell me about your country’s medical benefits, the more I find it amazing. It\'s great that the government provides subsidies of over a million won, since people with Parkinson\'s usually need a lot of help when it comes to medication. Hopefully, that can cover all your friend’s expenses in slowing down her disease.
- T. Caitlyn
After taking my friend to the clinic, I checked some grants or subsidies from our government.
>> CORRECT
I was surprised at various support for the people with Parkinson\'s disease.
>> I was surprised at the various forms of support for people with Parkinson\'s disease.
Those who are diagnosed with the disease but can\'t afford to buy some medications or get continued treatment like my friend can get financial support: over one million won monthly.
>> Those who are diagnosed with the disease but can\'t afford medications or continued treatment, like my friend, can receive financial support of over one million won per month.
In addition, those who can\'t work with the disease will be given support from local government.
>> In addition, those who cannot work due to the disease will receive support from the local government.
Their debts will be reduced or removed.
>> CORRECT
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