Surfing the internet.
학생이 쓴 원문
Surfing the internet is one of my leisure time activities.
I do that for about an hour a day on the average
The site that I visit most frequently is a fashion site called "Diesel Mania"
Diesel is a famous italian jean brand.
This site is very popular among young man.
In that site , we mostly talk about a fashion, girls and a daily life.
The best thing of that site is that I can see other's opinion about something.
I also can express my thinking on other's writing.
Sometimes I agree with that and sometimes I am against that.
Anyway, it is a good way to spend my free time.
강사 첨삭
[이름] my dear,
Nothing much to say but a job well done!
Keep up the good work...
Talk to you again later...
T.Cam
Surfing the internet is one of my leisure time activities.>>correct
I do that for about an hour a day on the average
I do that for about an hour a day on the average
>>correct
The site that I visit most frequently is a fashion site called "Diesel Mania"
The site that I visit most frequently is a fashion site called "Diesel Mania"
>>correct
Diesel is a famous italian jean brand.
Diesel is a famous italian jean brand.
>>correct
This site is very popular among young man.
This site is very popular among young man.
>>correct
In that site , we mostly talk about a fashion, girls and a daily life.
In that site , we mostly talk about a fashion, girls and a daily life.
>>In that site , we mostly talk about fashion, girls and daily life.
The best thing of that site is that I can see other's opinion about something.
The best thing of that site is that I can see other's opinion about something.
>>The best thing about that site is that I can see other's opinion about something.
I also can express my thinking on other's writing.
I also can express my thinking on other's writing.
>>I can also express my thoughts and opinions on other's comments.
Sometimes I agree with that and sometimes I am against that.
Sometimes I agree with that and sometimes I am against that.
>>correct
Anyway, it is a good way to spend my free time.
Anyway, it is a good way to spend my free time.
>>correct
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