Swimming

2011-04-21 · 첨삭 강사 Tiny

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I originally like doing sports and moving my body. For example, I like running, dancing, doing yoga and so on. I'm crazy about swimming nowadays. Actually, I was scared of being in water. Because when I was a little girl, I went to a public sauna and I fell into a big bathroom with a higher deep than my height. I faintly remember so far that I struggled. Now I seem to be able to swin across the ocean. My teacher's praises also assist that. If I had learned to swim during childhood, would I have been Yun-a kim in swimming pool ? Do you know Yun-a kim, a Queen of skating in Korea? Sorry :D Should I go to a place where you are ? I've been home almost this week. So I can't think up a topic of my composition. Swimming is only something fun of my life. How sad it is!

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Hello [이름]! Today is Maundy Thursday in our Easter Holiday. I am really bored like you. I hope we can talk more than 15 minutes. Haha! I’ll try to tweet you when I get home. Enjoy your weekend! -Tiny^0^ I originally like doing sports and moving my body. >>correctFor example, I like running, dancing, doing yoga and so on. >>correctI'm crazy about swimming nowadays. >>correctActually, I was scared of being in water. >> correct >> Actually, I was scared of being in the water. Because when I was a little girl, I went to a public sauna andI fell into a big bathroom with a higher deep than my height. >> Because when I was a little girl, I went to a public sauna andI fell into a big bathtub with a depth higher than my height.I faintly remember so far that I struggled. >>correctNow I seem to be able to swin across the ocean. >>spelling check: swim >> Now I seem to be able to swim across the ocean. My teacher's praises also assist that. >>correctIf I had learned to swim during childhood, would I have been Yun-a kim in swimming pool? >> If I had learned to swim during childhood, would I have been Yun-a Kim in swimming? Do you know Yun-a kim, a Queen of skating in Korea? >> Do you know Yun-a kim, the Queen of skating in Korea? Sorry :D >>correctShould I go to a place where you are? >>correctI've been home almost this week. >>correct >> I've been home almost the whole week. So I can't think up a topic of my composition. >> So I can't think of a topic for my composition. Swimming is only something fun of my life. >> Swimming is the only thing fun in my life. How sad it is! >>correct

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