Swimming
학생이 쓴 원문
I originally like doing sports and moving my body.
For example, I like running, dancing, doing yoga and so on.
I'm crazy about swimming nowadays.
Actually, I was scared of being in water.
Because when I was a little girl, I went to a public sauna and
I fell into a big bathroom with a higher deep than my height.
I faintly remember so far that I struggled.
Now I seem to be able to swin across the ocean.
My teacher's praises also assist that.
If I had learned to swim during childhood, would I have been Yun-a kim in swimming pool ?
Do you know Yun-a kim, a Queen of skating in Korea? Sorry :D
Should I go to a place where you are ?
I've been home almost this week.
So I can't think up a topic of my composition.
Swimming is only something fun of my life. How sad it is!
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]!
Today is Maundy Thursday in our Easter Holiday.
I am really bored like you.
I hope we can talk more than 15 minutes. Haha!
I’ll try to tweet you when I get home.
Enjoy your weekend!
-Tiny^0^
I originally like doing sports and moving my body.
>>correctFor example, I like running, dancing, doing yoga and so on.
>>correctI'm crazy about swimming nowadays.
>>correctActually, I was scared of being in water.
>> correct
>> Actually, I was scared of being in the water.
Because when I was a little girl, I went to a public sauna andI fell into a big bathroom with a higher deep than my height.
>> Because when I was a little girl, I went to a public sauna andI fell into a big bathtub with a depth higher than my height.I faintly remember so far that I struggled.
>>correctNow I seem to be able to swin across the ocean.
>>spelling check: swim
>> Now I seem to be able to swim across the ocean.
My teacher's praises also assist that.
>>correctIf I had learned to swim during childhood, would I have been Yun-a kim in swimming pool?
>> If I had learned to swim during childhood, would I have been Yun-a Kim in swimming?
Do you know Yun-a kim, a Queen of skating in Korea?
>> Do you know Yun-a kim, the Queen of skating in Korea?
Sorry :D
>>correctShould I go to a place where you are?
>>correctI've been home almost this week.
>>correct
>> I've been home almost the whole week.
So I can't think up a topic of my composition.
>> So I can't think of a topic for my composition.
Swimming is only something fun of my life.
>> Swimming is the only thing fun in my life.
How sad it is!
>>correct
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