taking care of your child -- 1

These days, most parents cannot have enough time to spend with their children because they go to work all day. So, parents tend to substitute their duty with buying expensive toys. But their children need parent's attention and spending time together. In my opinion, it is important for parents to spend time with their children. I will give reasons for my opnion. Firstly, children need proper guidance and discipline by their parents. Parents know their children best. They know when their children are having a difficult time, or when their children are just being hardheaded. Therefore, parents can call attention of their children when they act out. to be continued

It's great of you writing compositions every now and then. It's a good practice for you. Anyway, just study more words for your vocabulary and have more reading and listening activities then you'll do a lot more better.   *** Here are just some of the corrections you have to consider from your composition: 1. So, parents tend to substitute their duty with buying expensive toys. >>> So parents tend to substitute their duties by buying expensive toys for their children.   2. But their children need parent's attention and spending time together. >>> But their children need their attention and time to be together.   3. Parents know their children best. >>> Parents know best for their children.   4. Therefore, parents can call attention of their children when they act out. >>> Therefore, parents could call their attention when they're starting to act out. >>> Therefore, parents could do something when their children start to act out.   Have a great weekend with your family Sir! Take care! ^_^