Talent is the most precious property.

2014-08-12 · 첨삭 강사 Debby

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Most people think that giving back to communities is about money. However, people struggle to develop their talent and skill, and these can't be bought by money. For example, education is the most important to the communities and talented people can help develop it. Therefore I think we can all give back to our communities by charity money and volunteer.

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Hi there [이름]!^^ Thank you so much for this great ideas!^^ I am very impressed!^^ You sound very inspired.hahahaha. Please tell your girlfriend thank you for making you have a great mood all the time!^^ kkkkkkk (just kidding) Keep up the good work with your sentences. Take care!^^ T.Debby^^ Here are my corrections for you today: Most people think that giving back to communities is about money. >> CORRECT OR> A lot of people think that if they give money it\'s enough for the community.However, people struggle to develop their talent and skill, and these can\'t be bought by money. >> CORRECT OR> A lot of people would have difficulty developing their skills it\'s not changed by money.For example, education is the most important to the communities and talented people can help develop it. >> CORRECT OR> Education is a priority in some communities and people with talent can help improve it.Therefore I think we can all give back to our communities by charity money and volunteer. >> Therefore I think we can all give back to our communities by charity money and by volunteering.

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