Talk about a memorable, enjoyable, or strange dream you\'ve had?

2020-03-18 · 첨삭 강사 Rachel

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I remember of the strange but realistic dream that I\'ve had a long time ago. I and my family have moved to where we live about 18 years ago. There is a river flowing near our house, called Tancheon flowing from the southern part of Gyeonggi-do toward Seoul. The riverside road is good for people to walk, ride bicycles, and exercise, so our family often went there for a walk, toward the direction of Seoul. One day in my dream, I and my mother walked along the river toward the opposite direction of Seoul, and encountered a wall made of concrete blocking the river. I felt very sad that I have reached the end of the river, touched the wall, and went back. It was so realistic that I believed that the concrete wall truly existed! One day my mother suggested to walk along the river toward the opposite direction. I insisted that the road is blocked with a concrete wall. I could believe that it was a dream after walking with my mother to that direction and seeing the endless-looking wide river.

강사 첨삭

Hi Cindy,
Thanks for sharing your story about your dream:) It is an interesting read. ^ ^
-Rachel
I remember of the strange but realistic dream that I\'ve had a long time ago. I and my family have moved to where we live about 18 years ago. 
>> I remember the strange but realistic dream that I\'ve had a long time ago. My family and I have moved to where we lived about 18 years ago.  ((We usually put ourselves at the end and make people come first when we are talking about subjects)
There is a river flowing near our house, called Tancheon flowing from the southern part of Gyeonggi-do toward Seoul. The riverside road is good for people to walk, ride bicycles, and exercise, so our family often went there for a walk, toward the direction of Seoul. 
>> correct
One day in my dream, I and my mother walked along the river toward the opposite direction of Seoul, and encountered a wall made of concrete blocking the river.
>> correct (but it would be better if we say, my mother and I)
 I felt very sad that I have reached the end of the river, touched the wall, and went back. It was so realistic that I believed that the concrete wall truly existed! 
>> correct (awesome sentences)
One day my mother suggested to walk along the river toward the opposite direction. I insisted that the road is blocked with a concrete wall. I could believe that it was a dream after walking with my mother to that direction and seeing the endless-looking wide river.
>> correct

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