Talk about a problem in your community and propose a solution.
학생이 쓴 원문
In Korea, there is a issue about birthrate.
Because, it is too lower than the past
It is too difficult problem.
If the expense of raising baby could be decreased, like a education fee, many people could raise a baby.
강사 첨삭
Hey [이름]! Thank you for sharing your idea about the problem in your community.
~~Teacher Ryka^^
In Korea, there is a issue about birthrate. Because, it is too lower than the past
>> In Korea, there is an issue about the birthrate because it is lower than in the past.
It is too difficult problem.
>> It is a very difficult problem.
If the expense of raising baby could be decreased, like a education fee, many people could raise a baby.
>> If the expenses of raising a baby could be decreased, such as education fees, many people could afford to raise a baby.
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