Talk about Kim

2014-12-29 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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She retired after winning silver medal in So-chi winter Olympic in Russia. As a skating athlete, She has been considered as the model of challenge. Because figure skating is an unpopular sports in Korea. When she started figure skating, there was no support form the skating institute. So, her mother had to decide to invest her family's all properties for her future. To make her daughter good athlete, Good cough was needed and It costed a lot of money. After becoming an famous athlete, Her family is compensated through a lot of CF and famous. I heard that her next vision after famous figure skating athlete is becoming IOC member. Her career as an honorary ambassador for PyongChang Games would be beneficial for her next vision.

강사 첨삭

Good morning once again Mr. [Name]!

Well, I guess you are really staring your year right.

You are now sending your compositions. Wow. That\'s good! kkkk

And I appreciate it of course.

It ahs been a long time that you are not writing so writing your compositions is  a good practice too.

Thanks for your time today and see you tomorrow!

You take care and have a great day!


Always,
Kathrine ^^


She retired after winning silver medal in So-chi winter Olympic in Russia.

>> She retired after winning silver medal in the Sochi winter Olympic in Russia.
 As a skating athlete, She has been considered as the model of challenge.

>> correct!
 Because figure skating is an unpopular sports in Korea.

>> correct!
 When she started figure skating, there was no support form the skating institute.

>> correct! (from)
 So, her mother had to decide to invest her family\'s all properties for her future.

>> So her mother decide to invest all their properties for their future.
 To make her daughter good athlete, Good cough was needed and It costed a lot of money.

>> To make her daughter a good athlete, a good coach was needed but it costs a lot of money.

After becoming an famous athlete, Her family is compensated through a lot of CF and famous. 

>> After becoming a famous athlete, her family was compensated through a lot of CF and they became famous. 
 I heard that her next vision after famous figure skating athlete is becoming IOC member. 

>>  I heard that her next vision after becoming a famous figure skating athlete is to  become an IOC member. 
 Her career as an honorary ambassador for PyongChang Games would be beneficial for her next vision.

>> correct!

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