Talk about outdoor activity in Korea

Hello again Mr. [Name]!

Thanks for sharing your thoughts during our class.
Well, I have already shared to you what I think about the last sentence of your composition.
But anyway, we all have different opinions. I am just sharing what is mine.

Thanks for today and you next Monday. Enjoy your weekend!

Always,

Kathrine ^^

As I grow older, I have to admit I’m more concerned about my health. 

>> As I am growing older, I have to admit that I am more concerned about my health.
 A few weeks ago, I had a chance to ride a bike with my coworkers. 

>> correct!
 I have a nice bike that is a present from my wife.

>> I have a nice bike which is given by my wife as a present.

When I ride a bike, I used to threw on a cotton T-shirt, a pair of sweat shorts and running shoes.

>> When I ride a bike, I used to throw on a cotton T-shirt, sweat shorts and a pair of running shoes.
 When I got there, I felt a little out of place because every rider I saw was fully dressed in expensive outdoor clothing.

>> correct! 

All of them were dressed well.

>> correct! 
 I felt that I am a person from other country. 

>> correct! 

>> or:  I felt that I came from another country.
 Their cloth looks like very expensive.

>> Their clothing looks very expensive.

In fact, outdoor clothing is extremely popular in Korea.

>> correct! 
 The conclusion is that Korean people don’t hesitate spending their money for their health.

>> correct!