Talk about some of the interesting people you have met while traveling.
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Hello, [이름]!
Your story is very dashing.
Indeed, travel gives us interesting stories.
I feel like there was \"LOVE\" in the air.
I believe that travel creates meaningful relationships.
People you meet while on the road become some of the most valued names in your memory.
These folks give you a glimpse outside your hometown circle of friends, and force you to take in new and refreshing perspectives, and ultimately realize that everyone is the same.
Also, the places become the ones on the map to visit later on.
So, I think you have found your dream place.
~Teacher Chloe
I traveled Berlin for 8 days before coming back to South Korea from Ireland.
>>I traveled Berlin for eight days before I came back to South Korea from Ireland.
I supposed to meet a friend who knew when I volunteered an event named ‘one thousand jobs that we don’t know’.
>>I supposed to meet a friend I met when I volunteered in an event titled \"One Thousand Jobs That We Don’t Know’.
She invited me to her house and we looked around the city.
>>Correct!
A few hours later, we met her friend.
>>Correct!
She was Korean with yellow hair.
>>She is Korean with a blonde hair.
Her personality was very unique.
>>Her personality is very unique.
She looked a little bit agitated though, was a cool girl.
>>Although she looked agitated, she was also cool.
What is surprising is my hostel took just 5 minutes on foot from her house.
>>What surprised me was, my hotel is only five minutes far by foot from her house.
So we were back our neighborhood together.
>>So, we were back to the neighborhood together.
During walking, we talked a lot and realized we had many commons each other.
>>As we walked, we talked a lot and realized that we have many similarities.
OR:
>>As we walked, we talked a lot and realized that we have many things in common.
For example, we were having some hard times how to live and what is our mission or life.
>>We had hard times living and we never knew our purpose in life.
Staying Berlin I spent most of time with her.
>>I spent most of my time with her when I was in Berlin.
She took me very local places that tourist would never know.
>>She took me to domestic places that are infamous to tourists.
Thanks to her, I traveled in joy and Berlin became a special city that I wanted to live if I had a chance to live abroad.
>>Thanks to her because I traveled Berlin with joy. Since then, the city became a special place to me. So, if I would have the chance to live abroad, Berlin is the place where I want to be.
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