Talk about the fashion differences between ASIAN and WESTERN countries.

2019-08-27 · 첨삭 강사 Joylin

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Hi, good morning teacher joylin People in the West think they are clothed because they are physically tall. Summer is very hot in Korea and winter is too cold, so summer clothes and winter clothes are different. So women buy a lot of clothes to express themselves. However, there is no need to buy winter clothes in the Philippines which is hot weather among Southeast Asian countries I have been to. I got the impression that I was very comfortable with my clothes. I think clothes are an expression of the mood according to physical conditions and weather

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Hi [이름]!
Here are my corrections.
People in the West think they are clothed because they are physically tall.
>>Correct!
Summer is very hot in Korea and winter is too cold, so summer clothes and winter clothes are different. So women buy a lot of clothes to express themselves.
>>Summer is very hot in Korea and winter is too cold, so, summer clothes and winter clothes are different. Women buy a lot of clothes to express themselves.
However, there is no need to buy winter clothes in the Philippines which is hot weather among Southeast Asian countries I have been to.
>>However, there is no need to buy winter clothes in the Philippines, which has hot weather among Southeast Asian countries I have been to.
I got the impression that I was very comfortable with my clothes.
>>Correct!
I think clothes are an expression of the mood according to physical conditions and weather
>>I think clothes are expressions of the mood according to physical conditions and weather.

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