TALK ABOUT YOUR CITY AND WHY IT IS A BEAUTIFUL PLACE TO VISIT.
학생이 쓴 원문
My city is Daegu in Korea. There are many things I would like to say my city. I will say these three things. First, Daegu has convenient transformation. There are subway of three line and many bus not as well as Seoul. That\'s why It is very nice to live. Second, Daegu surrounded mountain. So It\'s safe for natural disasters. For instance, it is not flooding in summer. Additionally, we can enjoy beautiful view at top of mountain. Especially, The tall tower named e-tower is very beautiful at night. That\'s because It is a beautiful place to visit. I recommend this place to people who visit our city. Third, There is \'Dong sung Road\', the center of city. We can enjoy various performance in this road. It\'s my favorite place. So I visit three times a week. Gym where I go to is there too. Beacause of these reason, I think Daegu is beautiful place and nice to live.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Sally!
Thank you for sharing about it!
~T. Roanne ^_^
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Corrections and Suggestions:
My city is Daegu in Korea.
>> My City is in Daegu, Korea.
There are many things I would like to say my city.
>> There are many things I would like to say about my city.
I will say these three things. First, Daegu has convenient transformation.
>> Correct!
There are subway of three line and many bus not as well as Seoul.
>> There are subways with three line routes and many buses compared to Seoul.
That\'s why It is very nice to live. Second, Daegu surrounded mountain. So It\'s safe for natural disasters.
>> That\'s why It is very nice to live. Second, Daegu is surrounded by mountain. So, It\'s safe from natural disasters.
For instance, it is not flooding in summer.
>> Correct!
Additionally, we can enjoy beautiful view at top of mountain.
>> Additionally, we can enjoy the beautiful view at the top of mountain.
Especially, The tall tower named e-tower is very beautiful at night.
>> Correct!
That\'s because It is a beautiful place to visit. I recommend this place to people who visit our city.
>> Correct!
Third, There is \'Dong sung Road\', the center of city. We can enjoy various performance in this road.
>> Third, There is \'Dong sung Road\', the center of the city. We can enjoy various performances on this road
It\'s my favorite place. So I visit three times a week. Gym where I go to is there too.
>> It\'s my favorite place. So I visit three times a week. The gym where I go to is there too.
Beacause of these reason, I think Daegu is beautiful place and nice to live.
>> Because of these reasons, I think Daegu is a beautiful place and nice to live.
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