Talking about the teenager

2014-06-12 · 첨삭 강사 Liza

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Today is child slavery opposition day. I had backing for the Bangladesh child since 2013. I want to spend to school for the child and i hope she has to drinks some clean water. Now, she is student going to school at the slums village. Also, she drinks a clean water. But, still now a lot of students are not go to school because of poverty. It is so big problem. They need to learning something at school. so they must overcome poverty and escape the labor. Thank you teacher Liza ! Have a nice day. Ashley

강사 첨삭

Hello Ashley^^


I guess you are not that busy today because you were able to

do this homework. I agree with you in this composition.

It is really a truth that having a proper education can change a person and can

change the world at the same time.^^


Thanks for your effort and time sending this in.

By the way my dear have time to check my corrections below.

I want you to study the following:

- proper spacing and punctuation marks

- proper capitalization

- choice of words and spellings


Just feel free to ask me if you have questions.

See you in class^^


Teacher Liza



Today is child slavery opposition day.

>> Today is Child Slavery Opposition Day.
 I had backing for the Bangladesh child since 2013.

>> YOU MEAN TO SAY: I remember a child from Bangladesh in 2013.
 I want to spend to school for the child and i hope she has to drinks some clean water.

>> YOU MEAN TO SAY: I want to give that child a proper education and I hope that she can drink some clean water.
 Now, she is student going to school at the slums village.

>> Now, she is a student who is going to school and lives in a slum village.
 Also, she drinks a clean water.

>>In addition she can already drink clean water.
 But, still now a lot of students are not go to school because of poverty. It is so big problem.

>> But still, there a lot of student are not going to school because if poverty.
 They need to learning something at school.

>> They need to learn something from school.
 so they must overcome poverty and escape the labor.
>> So they must overcome poverty and escape childhood labor.
Thank you teacher Liza ! Have a nice day.
>> Correct
Ashley

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