talking is the best way to relief my stress

2014-03-24 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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Talking is the best way to relief my stress. It is very important to talk with whom. I often talk to Carolyn. I sometimes talk to my friends. Because My friend and Carolyn are always not with me, so I need to call to them. Every one gets hard time, the only difference between each other is when It comes to us. In this time, we need friends who listen our problem, we need girlfriend who extract a solution. Someone could say that It is wasting time. but I think It is the most valuable things to stay with friend who need help and caring. In these day, "Healing" is the term in trend. Healing means to cure not only resting physically, but also scar in mentally. It shows that Many people need help and care. The generation of our father , grandfather went through it whatever hard it was. but, they also need help and rest. I really understand their circumstances. the generation of (grand) father deserve to take a rest, to take care, to speak their worries. I can understand it

강사 첨삭

Hi there!
A happy day to you!
I hope you will be having more relaxing times with your friends even though you are all quite busy with your work.
I\'m moved by how you understand the way our older generation lived with healing.

Take care and always smile up your day!
_T.Nina^^


Talking is the best way to relief my stress.
>> Talking is the best way to relieve my stress.
It is very important to talk with whom.
>> It is very important to talk to someone.
I often talk to Carolyn. I sometimes talk to my friends.
>> I often talk to Carolyn and some of my other friends
.
Because My friend and Carolyn are always not with me, so I need to call to them.
>> Carolyn and my friends are not always with me so I need to call them.
Every one gets hard time, the only difference between each other is when It comes to us.
>> Everyone had a hard time; the only difference between us is how we deal with each other.
In this time, we need friends who listen our problem, we need girlfriend who extract a solution.

>> In this period of time, we need friends who will listen and give solutions to our problems.
Someone could say that It is wasting time. but I think It is the most valuable things to stay with friend who need help and caring.
>> Somebody told me that it is a waste of time. However, I think the most valuable thing to do is to stay with friends who need your help and care.


In these day, \"Healing\" is the term in trend. Healing means to cure not only resting physically, but also scar in mentally.
>> \"Healing\" is the term in trend nowadays. It means cure not only physically but mentally.

It shows that Many people need help and care.
>> Correct

>> OR: It shows that a lot of people need help and care.

The generation of our father , grandfather went through it whatever hard it was.
>> The older generation went through it no matter how hard it was.

but, they also need help and rest.
>> Correct

>> OR: But they also need help and rest.

I really understand their circumstances.

>> I really understand their situations.
the generation of (grand) father deserve to take a rest, to take care, to speak their worries.

>> The generation of our grandfathers\' deserves care, to take a rest and to take their worries away.
I can understand it

>> Correct!

>> OR: I understand it clearly.^^

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