Tangled
학생이 쓴 원문
Today, I went to the theater to watch the movie with my friend. I wanted to watch the movie “Black swan” but it was not released yet so we have to choose another one. We decided to watch the animation “Tangled” which is made by Disney. It was a story of the princess “Rapunzel” who is locked in a very tall tower because of witch’s jealousy. Of course, the brave prince came to rescue her from the witch. It was a little childish, but I watched it funny thinking of my childhood. When I was young, my mother often showed the Disney English Animations for me teaching English so actually I already watched the story of Rapunzel at that time. Actually, my friends said that it was very boring but I had a good time with it.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
You know what? I also enjoyed watching the movie “Tangled”. It was humorous. Also, I commend your mom for letting you watch English animations. It’s really a good way to study the English language and at the same time you are also having fun watching the movie. Good job!
- Faye
Today, I went to the theater to watch the movie with my friend.
>> Today, I went to the theater to watch a movie with my friend. / Today, I went to the theater to watch the movie “Tangled” with my friend.
I wanted to watch the movie “Black swan” but it was not released yet so we have to choose another one.
>> I wanted to watch the movie “Black Swan” but it was not released yet so we have to choose another one.
We decided to watch the animation “Tangled” which is made by Disney. [correct]
>> or We decided to watch the animation “Tangled” which is from Disney.
It was a story of the princess “Rapunzel” who is locked in a very tall tower because of witch’s jealousy.
>> The story was about the princess named “Rapunzel” who was locked in a very tall tower because of the witch’s jealousy.
Of course, the brave prince came to rescue her from the witch. [correct]
>> or Like in most fairy tales, the brave prince came to rescue her from the witch.
It was a little childish, but I watched it funny thinking of my childhood.
>> It was a little childish but I still watched it. It reminded me of my childhood.
When I was young, my mother often showed the Disney English Animations for me teaching English so actually I already watched the story of Rapunzel at that time.
>> When I was young, my mother often showed me some English animations from Disney. I actually watched Rapunzel before during that time.
Actually, my friends said that it was very boring but I had a good time with it.
>> correct]
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