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2020-07-10 · 첨삭 강사 Jasper

학생이 쓴 원문

Dear Sir or Madam I’m writing this email about the story about the boy that rescued the dog in the Humber river. I walked down through the north of the Humber river to back home 2 days ago. When I was passing the old bridge, I saw the dog jumping into the water to chase the ball. At first, the dog looked excited, but soon I realized that he got into the trouble. He seems to try to swim toward the land, however the water flew down so fast. He could not reach the land. Suddenly, the boy jumped into the water. He was good at swimming and quickly reached the dog. He put the dog inside of her left arm and swim slowly toward the land. The dog looked pretty heavy for the boy. However, he reached the end of the river and the dog touched the boy’s chick by his tongue with comfort. Many people around there was clapping their hands and give the boy some compliments. If you need future information about this story, you can always contact me by email. Regard, [이름]

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!

Here are your corrections:

Dear Sir or Madam
I’m writing this email about the story about the boy that rescued the dog in the Humber river. 
>> I\'m writing this email to tell you the story about a boy who rescued a dog in the Humber river.

I walked down through the north of the Humber river to back home 2 days ago. 
>> Two days ago, I was walking down the river going back home from a walk. 

When I was passing the old bridge, I saw the dog jumping into the water to chase the ball.
>> When I was passing by an old bridge, I saw a dog jump into the water to chase after a ball.

At first, the dog looked excited, but soon I realized that he got into the trouble. 
>> At first, the dog looked excited, but soon I realized that he\'s in trouble. 

He seems to try to swim toward the land, however the water flew down so fast. 
>> It was trying to swim towards the land, however, the water current dragged it away. 

He could not reach the land.
>> CORRECT

Suddenly, the boy jumped into the water. 
>> CORRECT

He was good at swimming and quickly reached the dog. 
>> CORRECT

He put the dog inside of her left arm and swim slowly toward the land. 
>> He put his arm around the dog and slowly swam towards the land.

The dog looked pretty heavy for the boy. 
>> CORRECT

However, he reached the end of the river and the dog touched the boy’s chick by his tongue with comfort.
>> However, he was able to reach the side of the river and when the dog was safe, it licked the boys chick with gratitude. 

Many people around there was clapping their hands and give the boy some compliments.
>> The people around were clapping and gave the boy some compliments.

If you need future information about this story, you can always contact me by email.
>> If you need further information about this story, you can contact me through my email at [이름]@gmail.com

Regard,
>> Regards,

[이름]

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