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Nowadays, there are many kinds of the greatest problems facing teenagers.
In my opinion, school bullying is one of the greatest problems of teenagers.
Because this problem has become the biggest issue in Korea.
So many celebrities who did school bullying when they were teenagers are kicking out of all of broadcasting.
Many politicians made a lot of solutions to the problem but most of all of the solutions are unuseful.
So this problem still remains a big problem.
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>> Nowadays, there are many kinds of problems facing the teenagers.
In my opinion, school bullying is one of the greatest problems of teenagers.
In my opinion, school bullying is one of the greatest problems of teenagers.
>> Correct
Because this problem has become the biggest issue in Korea.
Because this problem has become the biggest issue in Korea.
>> Correct
So many celebrities who did school bullying when they were teenagers are kicking out of all of broadcasting.
So many celebrities who did school bullying when they were teenagers are kicking out of all of broadcasting.
>> So, many celebrities who did school bullying back in their teenage years are getting kicked out in the media.
Many politicians made a lot of solutions to the problem but most of all of the solutions are unuseful.
Many politicians made a lot of solutions to the problem but most of all of the solutions are unuseful.
>> Many politicians made a lot of solutions to the problem, but most of the solutions did not work.
So this problem still remains a big problem.
So this problem still remains a big problem.
>> So, this problem still remains as a big problem.
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