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Many professions need persuasive ability. Almost all jobs relative to business have required persuasion.
Also, religious things must have persuasion and sellers need the ability too.
And political jobs like a president need this ability more than others.
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Well-said, [이름]! I must agree that most professions need to have this skill! Thank you for the nice answer! Have enough rest!-Faith-
Many professions need persuasive ability. >> CORRECT
OR Most professions require persuasive ability.
Almost all jobs relative to business have required persuasion.
>> Almost all jobs related to business require persuasion.
Also, religious things must have persuasion and sellers need the ability too.
>> Also, religious things must have persuasion skills and sellers need it too.
And political jobs like a president need this ability more than others.
>> And political jobs like presidents need this ability more than others.
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